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what i needed to say D1

Good bye

for every animal I have lost

Good bye

for every season that passed

Good bye

for my lost toys

Good bye

for all the houses I lived in

Good bye

to my good friends

Good bye

to my mother

all I wanted to say was

Good bye.

how does this make u feel?

do u have any suggestion on what to change?

10 min play draft 1

(Cast

[Sergeant] Truth-An African-American that has fought long and hard for this position

Zack Smith- A southern American 18 year old that is seeing the battle for the first time [Buck privet]

McGregor- A Scotsmen that was found with his team and drafted to this platoon [privet]

Vladimir- A soviet solder that was the soul survivor of his team after a brutal ambush [privet first class]

Narrator-the man that talks more monotone

All have thick accent indigenes to where they are from.)

(The seen opens with all cast on a WW2 jeep. There is sound of artillery fire off stage. Also sounds of bombs are exploding off stage.)

Truth

Ok ladies this is the moment u have been waiting for so get ready to open a can of whoop a** on those Nazi bastards!

(McGregor does the sign of the cross. More artillery fire off stage a jeep got hit by it screaming.)

Truth

D****

McGregor

(Sighs)

Smith

Glad that was not us

(To Vladimir)

(Vladimir glares at smith)

McGregor

Don’t mind him he is a bit sour from his loss at Stalingrad. By the way my name is McGregor. That is Vladimir of cores you know your 2 buddies and that is Sergeant Truth. (McGregor points to every one when he calls there name.)

Vladimir

Ve did not lose it vas… how you say miner set back.

(As he cocked his gun)

Truth

Hey you ladies getting along down there.

(Lights go out and machine gun fire is sounded…lights on the 2 buddies of smith are dead.)

Smith

Holy sh**!

McGregor

I think you jinxed us…

Vladimir

It is nothing new nothing at all

(Arrogantly)

Smith

Nothing why you son of a…

(Begins to stand)

(Truth grabs him and pulls him down artillery fire…)

Truth

You want to live whitey!

Smith

Yes

Truth

Yes what solder

Smith

Sir yes sir!

Vladimir

Stupid American

Smith

Shut the hell up comie.

McGregor

Who wants a swig…?

(He pulls out a bottle of whisky.)

Truth

How did u…never mind

(Takes bottle and drinks.)

Vladimir

Hand it hears I have not had a drink in a long time so how you say bottoms up (laughs and grabs the bottle.)

Smith

O hell yes give it (takes bottle before Vladimir can get a drink)

McGregor

Careful it is a little…

(Smith drinks and starts to cough)

McGregor

Strong.

Vladimir

(Takes bottle back) ha ha just like I said stupid American. (Drinks)

Truth

Any of you got families back home?

McGregor

I got a wife and a daughter.

Smith

I got a girlfriend and the family waitin on me to come on home safely. What about you?

Truth

Just my mom no wife or kids. And you tough guy.

Vladimir

This is point less but yes I do.

Truth

Well we are almost at Germany’s border…

Smith

Hey guys lets give ’em hell. For Pearl Harbor (putting his bayonet on)

Vladimir

And for my home land. (Cocking his gun)

McGregor

And for our families (grabbing helmet)

Truth

Good luck men now go get those Nazi bastards Go! Go! Go! Go!

Smith

Yee haa! (As he runs off stage)

McGregor

(Yelling while running off stage.)

Vladimir

SOVIETS! (Running off stage)

Truth

This is it… (Grabs gun) REMEMBER PEARL HARBOR!!! (Running off stage)

(Lights go out 3 gun shots are sounded.)

Smith

(From off stage) Serge… d*** you Nazis!

(Light come on over Sergeant Truth. Truth stands there no expiration on his face. The Narrator is saying epilogs.)

Narrator

Sergeant Truth was shot by enemy snipers never made it out 20 yards from their jeep.

(The light dime off of truth and light comes on over Vladimir as he stands there no expiration on his face.)

Narrator

Vladimir went back for Truth and carried off of battle. Vladimir had to watch Truth die. After he went out to battle and out of rage he ran straight for an enemy turret. He managed to get a frag grenade in the trench.

(The Light dime off of Vladimir and light comes on over McGregor as he stands there no expiration on his face.)

Narrator

McGregor stormed a building killing 2 snipers and a machine gunner. Sadly there was another sniper that was aiming at him.

(The Light dime off of McGregor and light comes on over Smith as he stands there no expiration on his face.)

Narrator

After seeing his Sergeant get shot… Zack Smith met up with another team and was sent back to America for injury. When he got back his girlfriend had left him for someone else. 1 year after he saw 3 sniper bullets pierce his Sergeants chest. He put a gun to his head and (gun shot) pulled the trigger. (Lights dim…)

a time my world changed D1

The Phone Call

My sister and I were told

that we were going to my

dad’s.

So we said

good bye

to everyone

then told are mom

that we would see her

Tomorrow.

We got to are dad’s

but he seemed more…

distant

then other times.

As we were just about to

be tucked in for bed

The phone rang

1

2

3

4

it stopped

A

moment

of

silence...

this was the

first time

I saw my dad
cry.

My mom had

passed away.

That was the start of the

Revolving door called

My life.

I am having trouble making it flow any advice?

what do you think of it?